Essay 11

Essay 11 Bell and Echoes


Bell Word: Teenager/Teenagers
Echo Words: juvenile, minor, stripling, sweet sixteen, teen, teenager, teenybopper, youngster, youth


Essay 11 Outline


TS: Teenagers have many problems
            SD: Teenagers have trouble in school
                        CM: School takes a big step from middle school to high school
CM: This can trouble people with managing their time or actually studying for tests
            SD: Teenagers want to be popular
                        CM: This can lead them into bad situations
                        CM: The popular kids don’t usually do what they are told
SD: Teenagers can’t control their parents
CM: If their parents don’t provide them the right things it makes it very difficult
                        CM: Sometimes they can’t even get food or clothes
CS: Teenagers can have many problems

TS: I, a 13 year old, have many problems

SD: I get blamed for everything in my family

CM: If my sister hits me I somehow "provoked" it

CM: Even if my parents watched my sister do it the will just tell us both to stop

SD: Some of my friends changed

CM: There were two kids that were my best friends in elementary school

CM: They have changed, and are now just acquaintances

CS: I have problems as a teenager



Essay 11

The Problematic Life of a Teenager:

An Essay on Problems among Teens

An Essay by Alexander Hawley

8^th Grade English

Pine Point School

April 6^th, 2011

People of all ages have problems, some big and some small, but the group of people known as teenagers definitely have the most problems. Teenagers from all over the world have problems from trouble in school, to making the wrong choices.  All teenagers have multiple problems varying in many subjects. I also have many problems, as I am a teenager. 

            Most little kids dream of being a teenager, but they don’t realize nearly how many problems teenagers have. The first big problem many minors face is that they have trouble in school. It is a very big step from the sometimes only 20 minutes of homework in middle school, to the aggravating 3-4 hours you can have in high school. Since the teenagers work load is made 8-12 times larger, it is very hard for them to manage their time, and once they finish their actual homework, except for studying, their first impulse is to catch up on video games, the entertainment they so dearly missed while doing their homework. Another big problem among teenagers is that many really want to be cool and popular. Since the popular teens don’t always do what they are told, the other kids trying to be popular might follow them into a bad situation. The choice that they make probably goes against their normal judgment, but all they care about at the time is being popular, but they don’t care about doing the right thing. The third thing is that some juveniles aren't born into a good family. This unfortunate teenager might not get what they need to succeed, but being so young, they can’t do anything about it. This is especially a problem for teenagers in high school who need to buy books and lots of other items for school. As you can see, the problematic life of a teen is compiled from many different problems.

I, being a teenager, have many problems too. The problem that I find to be the most substantial is the fact that I get blamed for every argument or fight that happens between my younger sister and me. Many people think of juveniles as badly behaved, so if my sister shoves me, I am immediately blamed for "provoking" her. Even in the case that my parents see me do nothing wrong, they tell us both to stop, in a sense still blaming me. Another problem I have faced as a teenager was that my best friends from elementary school, the trustworthy, friendly, and funny kids I met shortly after my arrival to Pine Point, have changed a lot and have forced me to adjust and make new friends who are trustworthy, friendly, and funny as teens. These old friends are now just my acquaintances, and one of them I don't really even talk to anymore. However, my new friends possess what my old friends did, but they possess these qualities as teenagers. Teenagers have many predicaments, and since I am included in that category, I do too.

    Teenager problems are sadly very abundant. Teens have problems like not having parents who can fully support them, thus, they cannot get what they need for school and other things. A big problem for other juveniles, like me, is the fact that their friends change while aging, so these unfortunate youths have to make new friends. Teenagers have a multitude of problems, which is why they were, are, and will be, known as the most problematic age group.

Self Assessment

1.      A writing issue that I am working on is proofreading and therefore taking out careless mistakes like typos.

2.      A strong point is that I think this writing was very organized and pertained to the topic perfectly. Also, I like the alliteration in my second long sentence

3.      A weak point would have to be the second chunk in the second body where the TS was so good that I didn’t have much for the two CMs

4.      I would give myself an A- because I think it was great except for those two CMs I talked about above.        

 

Comment:

            Very good second paragraph, however, you did have one issue. In second to last sentence you say my new friends poses, I believe you meant my new friends possess. It was very good otherwise.
Cassie