Alexander Hawley Essay #2
English Class
September 22, 2010
Un Poco Loco:
(A Little Bit Crazy)
An Essay on My “Crazy” Sister
"Strange", is a word that can be used in many different ways. It can be good or bad, too crazy or too normal, or even just plain weird, but no matter how strange you or someone else is, my sister, in a very good way, is the strangest for sure.
(TS) Some people are just normal people. (TS2) They do the same activities as everyone else, they act the same as everyone else, and they even look the same everyone, but not my sister Natalie. (SD) First of all, she has a very different personality; she is very crazy, or as some say, “Spazzy.” (CM1) My friend John always comes up and says, "Your sister is such a spazz."(CM2) However, she doesn’t care what other people think of her, which makes her different all by itself. (SD) Also, she always sleeps on the floor in her room. (CM1) This is especially weird because she has a really nice bunk bed about two feet from her head. (CM2) She says she sleeps on the floor because, “I have more room.” (SD) Lastly, she has really long, complicated, and weird dreams. (CM1) Her dreams involve crazy things like singing frogs, talking animals, and walking lollipops. (CM2) Another odd part of her dreams is that she memorizes the whole thing, and then she just sits there and recites it for 15 minutes. (CS) You can tell that the spazzy, dream telling, and floor sleeping Natalie is far from the normal people in the world.
Obviously, by the fact that she does odd things like not listening to what anyone tells her, sleeping on the floor, and remembering her dreams, she is odd. However, Natalie might be quirky, wacky, and spazzy, but she is the best sister ever.
Thank you, Natalie, for permission to write this essay.
I thought this paragraph was thought through very well and contained a lot of good sentences. However, there were a few punctuation errors. Also your TS is a little confusing, you might want to make it a little more thorough.
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